Click,click, smash, bang
Click, click, click, my work buddies and I type on our sweaty, greasy keyboards. Rattle, crack, shake, smash. Suddenly my computer falls then the building goes it crumbles with in seconds. All I can here now is faint screams and a groan from close-by. I yell “are you okay?” No response. Hopefully all it was that he didn't hear me. I yell again this time I hear back “yeah I should be” “are you you stuck under this stone hard frozen brick to?” Yes! Sirens Echo through the the daunted city. I smell smoke there must be a fire in our building, water starts to seep through beneath the rubble where I am hidden, after 5 minuets feet start to crunch up the mountain of rubble he can't here me So I fought and struggle to make movement. The hero called for help. I got out with only a Broken leg and severe bruising.
by josh dunlea
I really like the onomatopoeia that you used and the dialogue is well.
ReplyDeleteI really like the onomatopoeia that you used and the dialogue is well.
ReplyDeletei like how you described how the earthquake rattled the building.
ReplyDeleteI love how you described it, it is so interesting. You might want to read through it again, it has some spelling mistakes.
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